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Hi everyone,

I would be very gratful if anybody who looks at this forum would take some time to listen and comment on my songs I have on my site on Bandmix. I am putting songs on every day or so.

Please be gentle with any reviews but I will take on board any constructive comments.

Thanks everyone

Dave

Hey Dave.

I enjoyed the Jazz Thing.
The Demo was a rocker.

I did not care much for the rest. Just not my thing I guess.

Thanks for posting the music. Good luck on your projects.

hi sanshouheil

thanks for you comments mate more to follow

dave

Yah the mixes are off varying quality drums border on the wooden at times with some timing issues, some nice tasteful geetar playing, liked the strings tone on one of yer choons and a variety of styles too interesting stuff dave, get yerself a vocalist and that will start to pull things together. Seeing as you have a midi drum kit might as wothrwhile getting yerself a real drummer to add the frills and fluidity ( i am off course thinking from your profile that your mainly a geetarist and not a drummer, i will off course bend over to recieve a well aimed boot if my assumption is wrong lol) Anyways there some real potential in a few off the choons, check out some of hammies choons and you'll see i don't get it right too but i keep battling away.

Keep on rockin

HA ha HA Ha

Man whats this Goth scene thing at the botom of the page.

Damn, people are strange.

Lets all dress up like darth vader so we can be differently the same.



Sorry!

Well i fuking liked it Shows diversity and you like to try new stuff. Good on ya. Better than my crap, although it has to be said i've only been playing and writing for 2 years.Oh i know there's a lot of room for improving (aircraft hanger) .

Nice

Cheers
seppo

Hello Dave,
This is Mark from Sussex England here.
I am starting Song Of Life as we speak... it ends abruptly, but I don't know if this is a another track now or an extention of the same; some nice images coming out here of wind and space.
I think that was actually Dogs Of War.

Your studio is a bit like mine; even has the same swivel chair, but I just have Traps electric drums which are easy to record and don't piss off my neighbours!
A jazzy track now... yes, Jazzy Try: hmm, a bit doodly and American B movieish for me, not that my stuff is particularly confident and flowing though!

I think you use a computer to record; I guess Home Studio or one of those programs; I was too dim witted to master it and now have a simple Tascam digital recorder.
Like you said for your songs, I too need to find a singer as everyone identifies my voice as being too weak, which I agree on but just cannot find someone nearby who wants to sing my stuff.

Distand Smiles now: a more defined song style here, with a 'new romantics' flavour of the eighties I think... yes I like this the best so far.
Your voice is quite good I think Dave; certainly better than mine! Though that alone isn't saying much!

Why Should I: starts with for me a bit too much of the E to F semitone repeated chord thing... hmm, I like this the least, at least it engages me less than any of the others, so a shame it falls at the end... no hang on more have appeared.

Better Lep: has a thing I don't like in songs where the main chord sequence gets repeated four time as an intro, but I am being picky Dave, and a music friend of mine gets really irritated by my little guitar overtures that I write to start my songs often.

Lazy Hazy: nice title and a good moody start... interesting counterpoint of the basic rythm and a sinth melody with another emphasis... repeats for a long time, though I am not saying too long.

Where Is Your Love: I guess you have a vocal line that we don't hear? Quite nice the backing track and I am imagining some really good singing to it! An impassioned guy on a beach in the wind singing where is your love as he gets increasingly drenched in salt spray!

Where there are words your tracks come alive Dave; as instrumentals the other tracks jog along, but don't really jump out at me as having enough to focus on.
I appreciate that when you hear them yourself you probably have vocals running in your head, and because I am in the same boat myself I see when something is still a work in progress.

In many way you and I are doing similar things.
I have just started learning the drums and cannot keep it going well enough yet to record a song, so all my existing songs have me doing drums with hands on the back of my acoustic, or me drumming fingers on the strings of my bass guitar.
Thanks for inviting a critique of your work Dave, it was fun.
Cheers,
Mark.................

Hello Hammy,
I liked 'Goodbye Cruel World', but some interesting bits cropped up in several of them.
Now Say it ain't true with a nice stomping bass to it... I keep waiting for words to start; actually in this track it could be quite effective with just speech not singing.

Can you opperate all the stuff yourself when you record or do you need someone to press knobs for you?

My studio is one curtained off end of my workshop!
Cheers up there, and me and my girl are coming up to Mull this summer when I finish building our campervan!
Mark.....................

I sort of liked the first tune.

Hello Captain,
I just listened to the song you have on site... yes it is nice, and I thought very much a mix in style between Oasis and Hendrix' song Axis Bold as Love.
With my little computer speakers it was a bit faint and indistinct, but was okay; do you have any others to put on?
Cheers,
Mark...............

Yeah more on myspace, but not much more. (I don't trust them)

Saving other material for non-public venues. (I am hinky about posting that which I do not have copyrighted.)

Working on "Tomorrow Never Comes" and "Love you to" for this dive, but it's not easy and my hardware/software is not cooperating.

Please don't hijack thread, my ears are sore already..

Hello Captain Scott,
In which way did you mean I had hijacked the thread?
I thought the thread was about people's songs put up on the site; or perhaps you didn't mean me! Either way, keep up the song writing.
Mark.............

Sorry Mark, wasn't really sure what this topic was about by this time..

Hello Captain Scott,
I am forever picking up on something in a mail and going off at a tangent; but this time I was fairly sure I kept to the general subject... of course it will evolve!
All the best,
Mark.................

Hi everyone,

I would be very gratful if anybody who looks at this forum would take some time to listen and comment on my songs I have on my site on Bandmix. I am putting songs on every day or so.

Please be gentle with any reviews but I will take on board any constructive comments.

Thanks everyone

Dave

Distant Smiles: One of the better overall melodies I've heard yet from you. I suppose that has to do with the more unique vocalist .... still a bit lacking in the hook aspect though - it seems that the verse melody is stronger than the chorus - or at least about the same. the hook isn't quite ... it's just sitting there not lifting up from the verse. gotta figure out how to make that chorus soar. It's the best song I've listened to that you have posted on 5/13/09 and from a personal perspective, I really really dig this one. but I know it lacks a few elements that you'd like it to have to appeal to a broad audience and I recognize where you've not hit the mark ... you have a melody that grows on you with this - and in my opinion, that's a much stronger song. but there isn't instant gratification from a sure fire hit you in the face hook (that a listener will tire of with repeated listens) ... so commercially, you're still not there unless suddenly some of the listings ask for really good songs instead of clones - cus this is a really good song.

The other songs "that are good songs" seem imcomplete and their is a timing problem with the drums and the rest of the insturments. They are like song ideas waiting for something more to happen. Good stuff but needs more work to be commercial, if that is what your looking for.