neanderpaul wrote:I don't know how.
Pfffft! I think you just did.
Mike I agree 100% with Paul's critique. I think you have a songwriting talent yet the performance still needs some work IMO. Vocal pitch and phrasing, sense of timing, and drums detract rather than add to the piece. A little tune-up with a metronome and a good vocal coach might put a lot of shine on your music.