General Music Chat

Here's the lyrics of the new tune we're working on. Comments always welcome.

King of Nothing

It seems you’d forgotten

Why you were here

Now the shock has subsided

And the vultures appear

It happened so fast

But the coverage was amazing

Every angled covered

Now the sheep are out grazing

Eating out of the palm of your hand

Minds so very small

Against a scheme so grand

So totally out of it

That it never even hit them

Amused and confused

The solution's the problem

Haven’t slept in three days

And it’s four in the morning

Breaking news updates

Happen without any warning

I cannot go to sleep

As the story is told

Gotta see it first hand

Before the corpse is cold

Cable news lady

Imagines the ratings

Special guests smirk

At their pompous debatings

You must have known

This would be quite a circus

They feed us more lies

And then circle jerk us

Now you’re worth more in death

Than your pitiful life

You took lots of drugs

And a whore for a wife

I feel somewhat sorry

And I think that it’s true

All your money and fame

Sure couldn’t save you

Interesting approach. No hook. No chorus. I wanna hear it in a musical context. Good lyric, if it works within the music, but the lack of a repetitive refrain or catch phrase worries me a little.

Don't let it worry you too much Phil lol. Several of our tunes have no chorus/hook; they balance the ones that have obvious choruses/bridges/structure. Keep in mind we're punk/hard rock.

It's very difficult to know if lyrics will work without a song to go with it. If I had read the following lyrics I would have said there's no way they would work in a song:
I feel good
I knew that I would
I feel good
I knew that I would
So good...so good..I got you

I feel nice
Like sugar and spice
I feel nice
Like sugar and spice
So nice...so nice..I got you

When I'm holding you
In my arms
My love can't do you no harm
When I'm holding you so tight
My love can't do you no harm

Repeat first three verses

Now if somebody would have told me this is from a smash hit I would have said there's no way. Your lyrics are obviously much better and more interesting than these (James Brown lyrics) and if the music is good to go with it you've got something great...

Thanks Bob, although I don't think the lyrics are better than "I Feel Good". Maybe "Hot Pants".

And then circle jerk us

With you on guitar, how can it miss.

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