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I wrote this tune bout a year ago... Decided it was worth revisiting so I redid the entire song.
Kind of mid-life issues... accepting my Salieri in life.
Any thoughts... critique away.
I aint skeerd!

Uhhhh....
"Last Call"

Interesting, I hear a Dire Straits dynamic in your latest tune.

It's LAST CALL, we're talking about yes?

Yeah... "Last Call"
First tune on my player...

Other than the some of the phrasing of the lyrics seem a little rushed and the drums are a little off sink at the start. Nice tune.

I like the guitar

The mix needs work, (so doeseverything I've evr recorded)

I like it lyrically, and thematicaly, but after reading
the lyrics I think its a couple more rewriteds from
being complete. (I know I said I think)

Brother your musically talented, and what I consider
to be one of the best people on this forum ( I know doesn't
mean much coming from one of the worse)

I liked it

Other than the some of the phrasing of the lyrics seem a little rushed and the drums are a little off sink at the start. Nice tune.

I agree.. I'm going to revisit the vocals. I can't do much about the over-all sound of the vox but there are a few spots to correct.
Thanks RG!

I like the guitar

The mix needs work, (so doeseverything I've evr recorded)

I like it lyrically, and thematicaly, but after reading
the lyrics I think its a couple more rewriteds from
being complete. (I know I said I think)

Brother your musically talented, and what I consider
to be one of the best people on this forum ( I know doesn't
mean much coming from one of the worse)

I liked it

LD,
Hope all is well and your music is coming along... Post something when you get something recorded. I'd like to hear what you're doing!

If there is something specific about the mix let me know what you're hearing.
I won't say no more re-writes on the lyrics but it's one where I said what I had to say. Where I find it weak I can't fix... it's what comes out of me gob when I try to sing!

Song has a nice overall thing going for it.
Vocals are a little mumbled/hard to distinguish at the very start.
Mix - hi-hat or shaker in right speaker needs to be addressed, move it a little to the center, and EQ. Guitar lead tone might be changed - gives it a very country sound as is. Tele or Strat?

Perhaps it's the four hour rehearsal yesterday.
Or my trip to the range with my M48 Mauser this morning.
Cheap assed computer speakers . . . ?

Have a little trouble making out lyrics at several points in the production.

These days I find myself really listening to lyrical content.
Bugs me when I cannot make out all the words.

Mike, Sans,
Thanks for listening.
The vocal was suppose to be almost whispered low growly voice. (My natural sound) To convey the somber mood of the words in relation to the git lines. I guess if you have to explain it... fail.
I posted the lyrics in part because I know I need to work on my annuciation.
Mike the HH sound is center and there are isn't a shaker played on the tune... maybe your speaker balance was off?
The git is a Squire Pro tone series in the 2nd pup position... the song I believe would be classified as "Americana" so the jangly sound is intentional. But I understand where you're coming from.
It does remind me a bit of Dire Straits as Scott had mentioned... wasn't intentional just how the pieces fell.
Well...
Back to the DB!
Thanks again@

Nothing wrong with Dire Straits.

Just try to play some of the Knopfler materials, you'll realize quickly that it's tougher than it looks and that feel is pretty damn cool to boot.

The finger style alone will chew your hands to greasy bleeding stumps.

Mike the HH sound is center and there are isn't a shaker played on the tune... maybe your speaker balance was off?
The git is a Squire Pro tone series in the 2nd pup position... the song I believe would be classified as "Americana" so the jangly sound is intentional. But I understand where you're coming from.
It does remind me a bit of Dire Straits as Scott had mentioned... wasn't intentional just how the pieces fell.
Well...
Back to the DB!
Thanks again@

I confess to using my computer speakers (they are deep box, at least, not those new flat ones that come with computers), but I'll listen again with headphones to the high-hat.
If that's the sound you want for the guitar, then you accomplished it!

If that's the sound you want for the guitar, then you accomplished it!

In the end it seem to fit more so than the other options I have.
I had no preconceived sound it just evolved to this. That's how most things work for me since I'm not tied to a band , particular sound or style... so whatever comes to me is an opportunity.
Just exploring.

Capt. I agree.
imo Knopfler is a great player. He somehow managed to carve out his own sound on a strat with that right hand pick and pickless approach. I know he's an admirer of Chet Atkins.
Very identifiable melodic player.


And by no means am I making a comparision to my playing and Knopfler... although it would probably generate some interesting responses!

Jahva everytime I listen to your material Roger Waters comes to mind.

Nice tune, nice guitar work.

On vocals if you are going between low whisper to singing full voice a trick Ive always used was a compressor/limiter. Not sure if you have that or not, but you can set your threshholds so that your vocal volume stays consistent no matter how you are singing. Might help on a song like this to let the vocals ride on top of the music.

Its a little outside of my taste in music, but I think you have a good song there, just keep tweaking on it.

JW,
I use a simple version of Pro Tools so yeah it does have compression/limiter.
I'll give it a try on a new track.
Thanks