Look man, I don't like to say I don't like something without saying why, nor do I like to compare artists to others without a reason.
My point is your message, you want money. Well, I was listening to this 20 years ago with Erik B. and Rakim, and a slew of other rappers. Still, I prefer to listen to Erik B. and Rakim here: Paid in Full -
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=E7t8eoA_1jQ&ob=av2e.
Why? They're saying something. That was a badass album. And it makes me want to get up on the floor. I guess people don't like to dance anymore, I'm old school, I like to get on the floor or at least bob my head or jump up and down. It doesn't matter the genre, a song has to make me want to move or groove to it.
Your song shows you guys fooling around in the studio, talking about making money and getting women, the same ole spiel which isn't bringing anything new to the table.
If you truly love Hip Hop then show people something different. Show them something that sets you guys apart from all the other fellas out there rapping, because right now, I can compare you to thousands of other cats who come to me wanting a listen. There's nothing new or interesting, just the same old cliches and stereotypes which make me hate what it's become in the first place.
So think about it and come up with some that makes people want to hear you and take notice.