Hey, Bobby.
(off microphone, "You oughta delete all that blank space from your signature line, man.")
I just listened. I like the progression.
I think the vocals come in at just the right time; the opening has a nice progression that sets up the song.
Not every song demands instant gratification; stick to your guns.
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It's a pretty good song, and yep - Ryan is right, it does sound like an old song; I'd probably place it a little earlier . . .
But, that's ok: it's done pretty well.
Your audience just won't be folks under 25 who prefer hard rock, heavy metal, punk, and similar genres.
And - I'm sure that suits you fine.
Which is as it should be: write for yourself.
And you can share it . . . leave a legacy.
Keep writing good stuff, and there'll be a market for it.