United States

Monolouge voice-Hang em, and hang em high!
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Do a shredy-freddy and give me five
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A hot day in the middle, middle of July.
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Say a prayer for the quick and the dead
Call the preacher, and hang your head
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Ain't got a pot to piss in, or 50 cents
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And I Can't find a whore, or a room to rent.
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buzzards overhead, and looking for meat
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flies flying around, looking for something to eat
dropping dead from smelling Dutchman San's feet
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Preacher Philyby tire from chokin his chicken,
but he's got to bury the dead, or the buzzards's will
get the best pickins
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Shreddy Freddy sleeping off a bottle,
smellin bad, and a snotty nose
long forgotten baths and dirty clothes.
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Ghost town, the Rev, and Sans Shreddy Freddy./ Shhhhh as they disappear in a dream as the sun goes down, and the moon goes up high.

Anyone else seeing a pattern here??

I think I know where he's stealing his songs from.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=92utho4P ... L&index=11

I don't know... They seem awfully close to me.

A word to the wise Mr. Writer, don't mess with Dutchman San's feet, they're registered lethal weapons.

Do you mean like Billy Jack's or like Fred Flintstones?

Writer - is this "song" a threat? Hmmm? Are you some nutcase cracker jack poor man's Jeff Dahmer-wannabe disguised as a lousy lyricist/clownish composer/internet-spammin' rambler? Cuz that's how you're starting to look, since you can't seem to write any real songs anymore. Have I had that big of an influence on you? Lil old me? Wowzers! I never knew I was so powerful that I could become someone's major muse.

Think about that! You must be on pretty shaky ground if you let someone else's opinions of you control your behavior to this extent. My words are simply that - only words. They were meant to instruct, to help you become something you aren't, but that you claimed to be, at first. When you persist in your oblivious and amateurish way, you can only expect derision from us all. When you turn to make things personal, you are going to get it back, in spades, & you give away all of your personal power.

Get a backbone, writer! Don't let lil old me control you. If you really ARE a "writer," then write, if you can. Spewing the garbage in your mind might feel very good, until you come back to the junk you've penned a few months later & see how weak it all is, how much of your ugly inner child you've exposed to us all.

Here's a challenge for you, to prove that you are, indeed, a "writer."

1) Write a 17 syllable haiku about the life of the cicada (also known as the 17-yr locust, in some areas) as it grows within the ground

2) Write a love song lyric that doesn't include any reference to a woman's physical beauty

3) Write a song about war that includes no descriptions of hate or glory

4) Write a lyric for a children's song

If you can do any of these 4 things without talking about how much you dislike any of us, & WORK on them to make them quality pieces, I will consider you a "writer." If you can do them all, you may in fact be a very good, very creative one. Take your emotions away from us, & put them into your work. Keep in mind that none of these are easy tasks. I'd be hard-pressed to complete them, myself, but I haven't dubbed myself "The Writer," so for you they should be a piece of cake. (Actually, I have done #2. That's the easiest one. I've also done #4 successfully.) I'm keeping in mind your quote - "In writing, poems or songs, I have found that you need a theme, subject, and an action. The more you stray away from the norm the more successful you will be." Well, you can't stray too much farther than #1, above. That will probably prove to be the most challenging for you.

In suggesting these topics, I am in no way attempting to control you, either. I just want to see the actual depth of your ability. Can you do it?

If you decide to accept this challenge, I will leave your work alone, not even to give a suggestion or criticism. I will leave it to the forum to decide the worth of your work, so you needn't worry about my "poison pen."

The ball's in your court, writer. Give it a real try & get back to me if you can do it...or you can keep spewing stuff that will embarass you later...it's up to you.

in my darkness i can hear you
in my silence i can feel you
are you listening as im screaming
someone come to rescue me

did you ever think
you'd be the one who'd put me here
did you ever see
you were the one who left me to cry

in the end i guess what matters is
you and i were never meant to be
and my only solace is that i am better
than you could ever be


when all is said and done
i will be the one
who will come back to haunt you
when all the ties are gone
you will be the one.....crying


not really my best work kinda pulled it out of my ass but had to contribute something

Very nice!! Are you an Annie Lennox fan?? That's kind of the voice I can hear singing a song like that.

Good stuff.

i actually am i like singing her stuff for karaoke

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I am a burning bush of cast away tires
A freedon train of broken spires
The dog of war in a bed of flowers
The first three minutes of the final hour
I am the bark of an empty tree
what would you have me be

A wet cloth even for a dry tear
years and years and years
the question in the baby's eye
the comfort of a fall from high
A roadrunner swift with no flight
the angry beast that cannot bite
these things too are a part of me
what would you have me be

I am only spark
not the flame
I am only a board
not the game
I am now the empty tree
what would you have me be

No I don't accept the challenge. Because you are the challenge. You Phily are the challenge, and a funny one at that. Your poison pen was borrowed from the under the desk of American Idol..(Randy's) So if you want to call the kettle black in spades ( an ald W. Virginie antique linquistic putdown ) go right ahead. But I'll be the first..(there) I said it. Did you hear me? well if you didn't, stand over and get your jerk on, jerk. I guess a daisy will have to do.

What you have written, is beyound artistic beautiful description.
I would welcome the opportunity to read more of your writing's,
and from what I have read, your have a kindred soul.

The Writer=(Soon change)

wait who was that too?

Ethrea - you have to look in the subject line of writer's posts, cuz he always includes a title of some sort...

eh it was more i felt like writing at that partcular moment lol i think the whole thing is bs ^_^

I'm sorry I didn't specify. It was Hayden.