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#64510 by The Writer
Sun Apr 19, 2009 11:16 pm
Verse 1
Around my neck
my dogtags hang
proclaiming me a child of God
in Jesus name.
By the dogtags you can tell my DNA
I'm just here for a temporary stay.

Verse 2


I've been thru thick and thin
iron sharpens iron, steel against steel,
Lord knows I should of been killed.
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Chorus

Off in the distance I hear a warrior's yell,
My faith in God is not for sale.

Off in the distance I hear a warrior's yell,
My faith in God is not for sale.
(Loud)
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Verse 3

By the blood of Jesus, the victory is mine,
you can kill this body,
but the dogtags from heaven,
I consider mine! (EMPHASIZED AND BOLD)

Chorus

I CONSIDER MINE!

#64565 by philbymon
Mon Apr 20, 2009 10:36 am
Um...it should read "Lord knows I should have been killed," Mr. Writer. You need a lot of editing. I doubt anyone will buy your writing as it stands. I think you need to find another way to make money than writing either prose or lyrics, or pasting stolen musical bits together...

Just my opinion, mind you.

Have you considered becoming a ditch digger? You've dug yourself a pretty deep hole in here. I'd bet you'd be real good at it.

#64611 by Matt_Darcy
Mon Apr 20, 2009 4:07 pm
nothing sucks more than christian lyrics.

sing about something else.

#64684 by gbheil
Mon Apr 20, 2009 11:57 pm
Thanks Matt. :roll:

#64688 by HowlinJ
Tue Apr 21, 2009 12:03 am
Hey Matt,

Looks like Y'all best stay your ass outa Kilgore for awhile! :lol:

Howlin'
#64721 by The Writer
Tue Apr 21, 2009 3:30 am
I am able to write in any venue I like, and when I write the christany stuff, I don't write about spring showers in paradise...As you will see in 'I.B. Philyman in Skintights'. No hard feelings.

FranksInertia was good.

PS. I told you bro, I'm gonna make you famous!

#64764 by philbymon
Tue Apr 21, 2009 1:35 pm
Not with this tripe. Might work for the pre-adolescent crowd, if you took it to the schoolyard for kids to jump rope to, but it's far from artisitic writing. It's looking like I was right about you all along - you're not very good at anything, are you? Even your insults come up short when you don't do the research, bub. You don't know nearly enough about me to trip any triggers with this slime, so there's no need for me to feel insulted as your lil barbs fly right on past me.

Looks like you need as much schooling & practice in writing as you do in music. Go back to school, man. You've missed so very much, & it shows.

Come on! I ain't gonna get famous like this! No one's gonna read this stuff or quote it or find anything redeeming whatsoever in it. I'm counting on you, cuz all I've managed to do for myself thus far is a couple tv shows & some large venue gigs. Make me a star!

#64767 by Starfish Scott
Tue Apr 21, 2009 1:48 pm
I think he's trying, Philby.. LOL


Where do these mfers come from?
Next he'll be swinging his crutch at ya..

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