Hmm... It is true, you have to be careful with being forceful in this business. I mean I have never tried out for a band or record deal, but I know this just as commonsense. No one starts at the top. You got to work your way up the ladder.
I have a couple of suggestions:
1. Being that you are female especially, cut down on the cursing. Cursing a lot, especially from a woman, could prove classlessness, and I do not think you are personally, but a studio person might. It is not as expected from men I do not think, because most men are dogs

(Even though they should not curse so much either!)
2. When you write about yourself for any form of a job, even in music, use some grammar. Write a short resume about yourself, with items that mostly correlate to music.
3. Practice singing night and day and make sure to have plenty of samples. If your vocals are not where you want to be, get singing lessons, see if that helps.
4. Be tough and learn to take harsh criticism, it is going to come your way no matter how good you are. People can be downright cruel, but sometimes just telling the truth. Take their suggestions to fix whatever is the problem.
5. And most importantly, please be very patient. This will prove the hardest part of anything in life, especially music. I have been playing guitar 2 and a half years, and I am a long shot from where I want to be. I practice constantly, probably 5 hours a day or more at times. Patience is a virtue.
Anyhow, I am not some know it all, but I have read a lot, and talked to a lot of people. These are just suggestions, I mean no offense.
Peace out, GuitarAnatomy.