I write songs and song lyrics and I am looking to collaborate with a musician or a band. I am located in the far western suburbs of Chicago but I am willing to work with anyone in the Chicagoland area. Anyone out there interested?
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OK, I see that people are viewing this post/subject but I have no replies. if you're interested in seeing a sample of things I've written let me know and I will post. thanks.
Here's a sample of something out of the norm... any thoughts?
Animal Farmageddon
Well there’s a trouble deep a brewin’
Sheep a’ bleetin’ cow’s a’ mooin’
And I see a hammer subtly, fly by…
And when it crashes down
It brings that pig on to the ground
And the dog and cat just can’t imagine why…
And then that bearded Billy goat
Bites a chicken in the throat
As he stands there with a patch on his left, eye
And the dog and cat were scared
They were so ill-prepared
For the complete collapse, of animal and mankind
The Pigs are outa power
Hand of God has struck the hour
The Pigs, the Pigs are outa power…
The Pigs are outa power
This is their final failing hour
The Pigs, the Pigs are outa power…
And then the battle raged
As the animals came uncaged
And the black sheep used their wit and wondrous style
But that goat with just one eye
Would be the one who would deny
Those sheep, as they all flocked and fell in line
See though the sheep were weak
They were many and did seek
The same thing and the same thing, once again
And the things that they did seek
Were the things they wanted free
From their self-centered sense, of entitlement
The Pigs are outa power
Hand of God has struck the hour
The Pigs, the Pigs are outa power…
The Pigs are outa power
This is their final failing hour
The Pigs, the Pigs are outa power…
And now that hammer holding kid
Did all those things he did
For the ones he admired most
And the ones that he admired
Are the ones who toil and tired
As they worked, so hard from coast to coast
But then those little barnyard rabbits
Have made it quite a habit
Of multiplying on this side of the line
And so that hammer totin’ goat
Went and built himself a moat
With a fence, and an electrified barb-wire line
Oh the Pigs are outa power
Hand of God has struck the hour
The Pigs, the Pigs are outa power…
The Pigs are outa power
This is their final failing hour
The Pigs, the Pigs are outa power…
And of course that steady horse
Stood fast and held the course
But that’s cause he had blinders on both eyes
And then that patch-eyed Billy goat
Is the one who took the vote
And then those fat pigs finally fell in line
And then the sheep were lost
And they dearly paid the cost
Cause that ater ovine left ‘em high and dry
He promised them so much
But there ain’t no free f**kin’ lunch
And there ain’t no free, mother f**kin’ ride
The Sheep are outa power
Hand of God has struck the hour
The Sheep, the Sheep are outa power…
The Sheep are outa power
This is their final failing hour
The Sheep, the Sheep are outa power…
And then the cow and horse
Worked hard and held the course
As the chickens now aligned with all the sheep
And as those chickens were a cluckin’
Those rabbits were a f**kin’
And that wooly one’s sh*t started gettin’ deep
And then those little cluckin’ chicken
Will again, be finger lickin’
If they speak their beak and step way outta line
And as those sheep just keep a bleetin’
Those cows they started meetin’
Cause they say ol’ Blackie’s finally lost his, mind
Oh the sheep are outa power
Hand of God has struck the hour
The sheep, the sheep are outa power
The sheep’ve hit the shower
This is their final failing hour
The sheep, the sheep are outa power
He said he had a fix
By stealin’ from the rich
But that was such a flawed plan and bad design
But when those black sheep they took control
They were really on a roll
At least until that hammer sailed on by
Yeah that goat tossed it again
Hit the sheep and three chickens
Yeah that mallet met the mutton in the eye
Now with one sledge hammer stroke
He saved the farm from going broke
And his legend grew and grew there’s no deny
Oh the sheep are outa power
Hand of God has struck the hour
The sheep, the sheep are outa power
The sheep are outa power
This is their final failing hour
The sheep, the sheep are outa power
(c) 2013, alan r. krause
Animal Farmageddon
Well there’s a trouble deep a brewin’
Sheep a’ bleetin’ cow’s a’ mooin’
And I see a hammer subtly, fly by…
And when it crashes down
It brings that pig on to the ground
And the dog and cat just can’t imagine why…
And then that bearded Billy goat
Bites a chicken in the throat
As he stands there with a patch on his left, eye
And the dog and cat were scared
They were so ill-prepared
For the complete collapse, of animal and mankind
The Pigs are outa power
Hand of God has struck the hour
The Pigs, the Pigs are outa power…
The Pigs are outa power
This is their final failing hour
The Pigs, the Pigs are outa power…
And then the battle raged
As the animals came uncaged
And the black sheep used their wit and wondrous style
But that goat with just one eye
Would be the one who would deny
Those sheep, as they all flocked and fell in line
See though the sheep were weak
They were many and did seek
The same thing and the same thing, once again
And the things that they did seek
Were the things they wanted free
From their self-centered sense, of entitlement
The Pigs are outa power
Hand of God has struck the hour
The Pigs, the Pigs are outa power…
The Pigs are outa power
This is their final failing hour
The Pigs, the Pigs are outa power…
And now that hammer holding kid
Did all those things he did
For the ones he admired most
And the ones that he admired
Are the ones who toil and tired
As they worked, so hard from coast to coast
But then those little barnyard rabbits
Have made it quite a habit
Of multiplying on this side of the line
And so that hammer totin’ goat
Went and built himself a moat
With a fence, and an electrified barb-wire line
Oh the Pigs are outa power
Hand of God has struck the hour
The Pigs, the Pigs are outa power…
The Pigs are outa power
This is their final failing hour
The Pigs, the Pigs are outa power…
And of course that steady horse
Stood fast and held the course
But that’s cause he had blinders on both eyes
And then that patch-eyed Billy goat
Is the one who took the vote
And then those fat pigs finally fell in line
And then the sheep were lost
And they dearly paid the cost
Cause that ater ovine left ‘em high and dry
He promised them so much
But there ain’t no free f**kin’ lunch
And there ain’t no free, mother f**kin’ ride
The Sheep are outa power
Hand of God has struck the hour
The Sheep, the Sheep are outa power…
The Sheep are outa power
This is their final failing hour
The Sheep, the Sheep are outa power…
And then the cow and horse
Worked hard and held the course
As the chickens now aligned with all the sheep
And as those chickens were a cluckin’
Those rabbits were a f**kin’
And that wooly one’s sh*t started gettin’ deep
And then those little cluckin’ chicken
Will again, be finger lickin’
If they speak their beak and step way outta line
And as those sheep just keep a bleetin’
Those cows they started meetin’
Cause they say ol’ Blackie’s finally lost his, mind
Oh the sheep are outa power
Hand of God has struck the hour
The sheep, the sheep are outa power
The sheep’ve hit the shower
This is their final failing hour
The sheep, the sheep are outa power
He said he had a fix
By stealin’ from the rich
But that was such a flawed plan and bad design
But when those black sheep they took control
They were really on a roll
At least until that hammer sailed on by
Yeah that goat tossed it again
Hit the sheep and three chickens
Yeah that mallet met the mutton in the eye
Now with one sledge hammer stroke
He saved the farm from going broke
And his legend grew and grew there’s no deny
Oh the sheep are outa power
Hand of God has struck the hour
The sheep, the sheep are outa power
The sheep are outa power
This is their final failing hour
The sheep, the sheep are outa power
(c) 2013, alan r. krause
A little long as a smple, first of all. I could place music to my head with this in a Floyd/ Zep/ generish with a Def guitarist, but this is no stairway to heaven type of epic relief. cut the overmast.Fly your ship in low winds. these guys don't like lyrics anyways. Stay clear from frases already used in songs on the radio waves. I don't want to prove verses to discredit you. I feel an underside of your lyrics ready to bust. Crop, weave and whiddle. Make it fit in all your own words. Don't consider a blast of applause on this site when or if it's great. These guys won't tell you if your lyrics are worth the effort of putting music to. Don't go chasing rabbits. You cannot live where rabbits go.
Crunch
thanks for the input. I know it's long and would likely be over 5 or 6 minutes with music, but I think the topic is timely. any chance you can give me some insight to the lyrics that are already played on the radio. I am not familiar with any songs that contain any of the lyrics that I've used. thanks again.
Hey I thought it was a little long, I didn't read it all, Crunchys right, write and rewrite till you can make it about Animal Farmageddon. I liked what I read, your clearly talented with the word, hope you got some music to go with it, that's the difference between a poem and a song, I can't write poetry, but I think I'm a pretty good songwriter. Your a good writer and it shows, with people's short attention spans these days you'd probably have better luck getting noticed with a shorter version. It's an interesting thought Animal Farmageddon, I'd like to hear it with verse and chorus, maybe a bridge, or musical interlude, who knows.
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Thanks, the length is probably the result of the music I listened to as a kid (early Genesis, Peter Gabriel, Pink Floyd, Dylan, Rush, etc.)... now they have some long songs... I am planning on working with a local musician in January to write some music for my stuff. I have the melodies and have recorded the vocals but so far no music (other than some electronic stuff that I've added to give him an idea of what I'm looking for). I don't play any instruments... I've tried but I'm not very good. thanks for the comments.
Rhythm/meter - got to have it in lyrics. Your phrasing is all over the place -short lines, long lines, no pattern.
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when sung, there is a very flowing pattern. the short lines and long lines makes sense. I guess I'll have to post the recorded vocals and see what you think about the rhythm. Thanks.
#226972 by fisherman bob
Mon Dec 09, 2013 4:10 am
Mon Dec 09, 2013 4:10 am
Lyrics in and of themselves don't mean anything to me. I have to hear the music to go along with it.
#226973 by fisherman bob
Mon Dec 09, 2013 4:10 am
Mon Dec 09, 2013 4:10 am
Lyrics in and of themselves don't mean anything to me. I have to hear the music to go along with it.
Same.. Music first, then lyrics if the foundation is worth a flying crap.
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I agree that good music is critical to a good song, but at the same time, good music and crappy lyrics can be mind-numbing... just listen to many of the contributions of the pop music on the radio today... I personally can't stand songs with about 4 lines of thought repeated over and over and over and over and over and over and over...
Anak Sar Rule wrote:I agree that good music is critical to a good song, but at the same time, good music and crappy lyrics can be mind-numbing... just listen to many of the contributions of the pop music on the radio today... I personally can't stand songs with about 4 lines of thought repeated over and over and over and over and over and over and over...
what current pop tunes are you referring to? the ones i'm hearing w the same 4 lines repeated over and over all have music of the same inferior caliber....more often than not they're accompanied by some dumbed down, sanitized, no groove throwaway drivel that's not been performed by a band, but instead by some "producer" who's layered tracks. barf.
for my tastes, i can listen to fairly banal and trite lyrics (many Zep songs for instance) if the music is top notch. "Oye Como Va"....anyone? or how about some james brown?
on the other hand... it can be the most insightful, heartfelt, and creative lyrics but if the MUSIC ain't happening i have zero interest.
i think that's exactly why a lot of people can enjoy songs that are in other languages w/o having a clue what they're singing about. yeah, nice to know exactly what they might be singing about but certainly not necessary to appreciate if the music and vocals are for real.
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#227016 by Jahva
Tue Dec 10, 2013 12:46 am
Tue Dec 10, 2013 12:46 am
You should try a collaboration site... I can't really recommend any other than TwoTrackMusic it's the only one I've participated on. It's pretty slow moving but there might be some interest in helping you there.
There are other Sites if you do a search you'll find them.
Good Luck to you.
There are other Sites if you do a search you'll find them.
Good Luck to you.
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