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You guys have a very nice sound...Keep up the good work.

Actually I like the oww
Reminds me of Live.
Very well done. Dig the lil solo at the end.
If you were going for radio format, then you should just polish it up a tiny bit and that's it. If not, well, I'd suggest making it a bit longer. I dunno. I didn't feel like it should've ended that quick.
Keep it up, guys.

Hey Boys,
Like your style.!! Killer tone on the guitars.Yeah man , keep the OWWLL. Put some more tunes up if ya have them.

John

Listening now - I, too, like the yell at the intro. This is a good example of the more modern approach to harmony & overall arrangement. I like your voices a lot. Bass could come up a bit to make it a little "bigger." (I'm a bass player - didja guess?)

I like your guitar tones, but yeah, something could be done to make them even better.

Well done..

I agree with philby on most points. Good guitar sounds, really good in spots, I can see why you'd want it a little fatter (but not more distorted, perhaps eq'd) bass needs to come up. I agree with you, sight and sound, on the intro "owww" - ditch it. The vocals are good overall. Good tone overall except at 2:46 "God can save me now" kind of weak to me when ther singer gets that high. The vocals and harmonies at 3:22 are superb however! You have a good sound here. Pretty radio friendly with just a little tweaking. If the lyrics are autobiographical I feel for you. Nice guitar work on the outro. Good job overall. Post more!

Jim & Ben,

Good songwriting, solid playing, great singing, excellently recorded.
Top notch demo, IMO
All you need is a good bass player and drummer and you'll be tearin' up Nova Scotia!

Great job, good luck with your musician search, and welcome to the forum.

Howlin'

Like the music a lot. Good recording. Some of the vox could use more balls. More Bass guitar.
Being a yeowoooler myself I like that touch.
Being an old doper though I could not help but wonder though the whole song. If it is in someway glorifying the stupidity of drug abuse.

neanderpaul wrote:I agree with philby on most points. Good guitar sounds, really good in spots, I can see why you'd want it a little fatter (but not more distorted, perhaps eq'd) bass needs to come up. I agree with you, sight and sound, on the intro "owww" - ditch it. The vocals are good overall. Good tone overall except at 2:46 "God can save me now" kind of weak to me when ther singer gets that high. The vocals and harmonies at 3:22 are superb however! You have a good sound here. Pretty radio friendly with just a little tweaking. If the lyrics are autobiographical I feel for you. Nice guitar work on the outro. Good job overall. Post more!

I am really likin' this. If it made it to the mainstream you would have a hit on your hands. I can picture my hip hop, Evanescence lovin,multicultural son playinf this in his room. I quoted neanderpau because I think he is giving you a good critique of various sections of music. Me, personally, I would like to hear a fiidle added to the background towards the end. I like the guitar throughout. I would like to hear a smoother transition between the intro and the beginning of the song. It is almost audibly tripping. The intro itself is good but going from the intro to the beginning feels like someone stuck their foot out and tripped me. Now on to your next song.

Mary

Good song well done, I’d like to suggest to include a G-tar riff or a drum, bass tab to mark the transition between the chorus and bridge and coming out of the bridge as well, it took few seconds to realize that I was listening to a bridge but this is negligible and does not compromise the song.

Thumbs up Sight and Sound.

It's better than average..

Bass s/b thumping louder, doubled/sync'd with melody.
(When the bass is lower, you only get 1/2 the effect)

Otherwise, has a CREED quality IMO.

Thanks for the clairification on your lyrics. For sure you did not have to do that just for me or anyone else for that matter.
I appreciate good music but am weary of negative lyrical content.
Good song !
Thanks again.

Sight And Sound wrote:To all of you who took the time to critique this song, I would like to thank you. I think I have a really good thing going here and I would agree with most of what was said. I am going to drop the owwww. Though I like it, it is not really suitable for the song.

As for the lyrics to the song itself, this is not in anyway supposed to glorify drug use but it is about addiction. In the first verse, the guy is trying to stop using on his own but he gets so messed up that he goes back to the needle which is what the 2nd verse is describing. It is not about me. I have never been an IV drug user but I have known people who have been and what they went through. I was actually inspired to write this after watching Intervention on A & E. While most of my songs are autobiographical to some degree, not all of them are. Thank God, this one isn't.

I am pretty happy with the vocals but like a few of you said the high part "only God can save me now" is a little weak. I was fighting off a cold so I will probably record this again. Hopefully I will be smoke free then too which seriously prevents one from singing their best. So once again guys, thanks for the eval. I took many positive things from it and I will apply them because I want this to be the best it can be.

You might consider entering it in a songwriters competition.

Noooooooo!
Competitions suck ass. Stick to your guns, land the gigs, and knock the crowd's socks off!