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Thinking 'bout you.

I'm walking down the shore
Waves stroking my feet.
Because of you I'm feeling unsure about the way I feel about you.
You got me thinking of you.
Then all of the sudden I stop.
I don't know
I don't know
Whether this feeling is true ot not.

Why can't I be free
And live without you?
But I kind of like
Dreamin' 'bout you.

(chorus)
This feeling is sort of weird
I's like to be in love but I can't feel the heat.
I haven't been in love in athousand years.
I'm thinking 'bout you, but it's not real.
I know that this feeling's not true
But I'm thinking about you.

I like to dream alone
Wind stroking my face.
All of the sudden the feeling's gone
But it left a little trace of love.
I was daydreaming of you.
Then suddenly it went away.
I don't know
I don't know
Whether it should be this way or not.

Why can't I let go
And be without you
But it's kind of nice
To dream about you.

(chorus)

(bridge)
I know that it's strange
But it's also true.
I am not in love
But I'm thinking 'bout you.
It just comes and goes.
This thing isn't real.
I know that it's starange.
But that's the way I feel.

(repeat 1st half of the 1st verse)

I'm going to play the devil's advocate here...

To me, without music - Rhythm, melodies, vocals, etc... it's not a song.

It's poetry, lyrics, rhymes. Nothing more. Nothing less.

Calling a bunch of words a "song" is like calling a can of paint a "painting".

Ok, now everyone flame me

Actually Kramer I was thinking the same thing, but I guess it didnt matter enough to me to post it.


Flame On

jw123 wrote:Actually Kramer I was thinking the same thing, but I guess it didnt matter enough to me to post it.


Flame On

I spend a lot of time (too much) on harmony central- see a lot of that, so it's been driving me crazy lately lol. I've been crucified over there for saying the same thing.

Thank for posting more lyrics Marie-A. I think those lyrics would do best over an R&B or Techno like song, due to their length, and meaning, and the feeling they purvey.

Kramer, JW, sorry guys I have to completely disagree with you. Lyrics are more than you would think, if you have the right mindset you can hear the music that would go with the lyrics. I have written lyrics and placed music to them, it depends on what you feel inside. Lyrics are poetry in motion, they have meaning, they give off feelings and expression, like the music. If you can match the poetical emotions with a musical one, you got it made.

As not to be confusing, here is an example: Let us say I write a poem that gives off a feeling of confusion, loss of life, and depression - Well from this I know the melody has to be similar, it has to be darker, eerie, and give off the same feeling.

This is my take on it, just giving an opinion. Lol. I think everyone views things differently.

Marie-A, keep writing, and always correct yourself, it will help improve your abilities.

Peace out, GuitarAnatomy.

Guitaranatomy wrote:As not to be confusing, here is an example: Let us say I write a poem that gives off a feeling of confusion, loss of life, and depression - Well from this I know the melody has to be similar, it has to be darker, eerie, and give off the same feeling.

Don't get me wrong, I don't disagree with that statement. I just don't like calling lyrics a "song".

Lol. Alright, man. I understand.

I'm w/ GA. But - I'm also w/ the rest of you, too.
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I completely agree that a song is, first and foremost: music.
But a song is also lyrics (unless it's an instrumental).
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Lyrics can only be part of a song.
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And, lyrics can be written for a song, before the music is composed. Myself, - I prefer to do the music first, and the lyrics afterwards . . .
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And, lyrics and poetry are actually 2 completely different things, although they are very similar.
What differentiates them is the structure, and often the content . . .
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There are several internet sites devoted to lyrics. Music composers will visit to find words for a song.
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As to the lyrics in question . . .
First, thank you for listing them.
May I suggest dropping phrases like "sort of," and "kind-of?"
What they do is to dilute the emotion . . .
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OK, now the cross-hairs ore on me.

Lyrics is a song-under-construction. Just like a rhythm part, an intro bass line or an inspired drum beat
Keep on writing what you feel.

Lol, RhythmMan. What you say is true. Lyrics are important to me, very. But yeah, I have many pieces that are going to just be instrumentals I imagine. I have a new piece I am working, no name for it yet, I want to ask my friend if he will help me on it. He is a musical composer basically, or at least almost finished with school for it, and he has access to all of that. Heck, maybe he can find a way to force me to read sheet music and use a metronome.

Lyrics tend to be more repetitive than poetry, but they are sort of the same in my eyes. I have a lot of music written out, I will probably go the route of writing the lyrics when it is all done.

You know, this actually is a fascinating discussion.

Peace out, GuitarAnatomy.

Ok I got to throw this out there. Although I agree on "music" and why not I play guitar. But technically speaking to portray poety is to "sing a song".

Good lyrics + lousy music = bad song
Lousy lyrics + good music = bad song
Good lyrics + good music = great song

I'm kinda sorta in agreement with RM on this one. Those type of phrases in a song detract from its power, & make it sound sorta kinda wishy washy rather than powerfully declarative in emotion, which is what most lyrics reach for, in content.

Lyrics are hard to write well. You need to keep the message within the song meter, while stating something reasonably understandable in the fewest words possible, in many cases. Tossing in "kind of" in a song may keep it true to the meter, but it detracts from the message just as it does in a speach. It doesn't make it sound as if you're sure about what you say. And if you're unsure of it, then why would I listen to your message?

Sometimes a pause in the lyric works more powerfully than extra or "fill-in" syllables.

Marie, when I write tunes sometimes I will have 10 pages of lyrics and then in the end I edit it down to the most basic elements.

Not that Im any expert, but the lyrics you posted if set to a slow tempo, the song could wind up being 10 minutes long and most people lose interest real quick.

I say hit the listener hard with the best line you have to pull them into the song.

Good Luck

Poetry is not music, dammit.
This misconception is what bore rap music.
Need I say more?