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This song can be taken in any direction. I wrote this song out
of pure frustration and anger towards things! Some of you
might think of the mosh pit when you see the lyrics and some
of you may not. Anyway here goes enjoy don't forget to tell
me what you think!

Intro: Effects of someone being beat to death

1st
verse
Beaten beyond regonition skull prodruding through
the skin never will you breathe never will you dream
again! (NEVER AGAIN)

CHOURS)
Broken neck, severd spine
torn out eyes under the pale
moon you shall die!

2nd
verse
At your funeral in the casket your fears come
alive. Laid to rest destroyed you had no face
(NO FACE)

solo 1

CHOURS)
Broken neck, severd spine torn out your eyes
your not going to survive AHHHHH!!!!

solo2

3rd
verse
Moonlight is your only security as you stumble down my
path. Chilling cold as darkness surrounds as your body
endures my wrath!

Chours)
Broken neck, severd spine your blood is my wine.
DIE under the pale moon. ROT under the pale moon
I'm taking life under the pale moon.

Jesus, dude....

You need to watch a few sunrises or something.

I love sunsets and sunrises but when it comes time to write it's death
all the way!

Why?

Is the tempo like an obituary riff? example red neck stomp

I'd change the chorus a bit.

Uh, you said change the chours why what's up? I can't really
point out who it sounds like. The begining riff is a head bangin
delight the chours part I'm still workin on.

Just add more lyrics to the song.If it's a death metal song it kinda a short
one eh?Unless your writing a grindcore tune.

I'll see what I can do. I'll try to make a little longer!