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This is part B of the Muse.

This song explores the very last moments of Steve Edward's living thoughts in the hospital. Knowing him as i did, I had figured him for just going through the DTs and such, and I thought he'd just get through it and come back home in a week. I didnt bother to go see him, as it was always routine on his part...

I was wrong. I never did get the chance to say good-bye to him... It was too late by the time i figured it out...

So All I could do was speculate what was in his mind, his heart, naturally with a boat load of poetic license on my part...

The very last 15 seconds of this song , I tried to imagine and capture that moment, as he is carried off by death....As he simply ...and finally...let go.

Lyrics are posted on my profile

A few too many string squeaks in the ending, but real nice. I was thinking that you could bring the strings in earlier, and ramp up their volume a bit in the last chorus part, but that's just personal preference.
You could also extend the ending.

I am attracted by the poem quality of this song. The guitar is very acoustic, lo-fi, and yet it carries a powerful melody that the separate, very monotonal vocal line seems to float above the strings in a haunting way. I missed the bridge in the first listen and I feel in some way it should stand out. Liked this a lot.

I don't think any one up here realizes just how great you actually are as a songwriter , singer, musician.
Great Dawg, just GREAT!

Cool, sounds like a slower "The Who" tune..

gj..

As i've said before. You have a Lennon quality about your voice and writing. I enjoy listening to you.[/b]

Awesome Grant you are my favorite "Tunesmith" on this site! You might want to fix a typo in your lyrics you left the r off of incrementing

do you mind me asking, did you record this on your own recording equipment, and if so, the make/model of the gear, or was this done at a professional recording studio?

Excellent.
Jeanette said you have a "BEATLES" quality about your vocals and musical style.

I never liked making comparisons so I'll just have to give two BIG THUMBS UP !

Much Thanks to all you guys for listening.

Mikeb: I agree the squeaks will get cleaned up. Also agree about the crescendo build up... We actually had the levels higher, but slewed them back... We'll most likely scoot them up again, Still trying to find that sweet spot. Also, The ending ...that was an abrupt cut off, (not the final mix) case my partner was in a hurry. In our final mix, The cut off will be adapted to do a natural and resonating fade out. ALSO, You just gave me the answer I needed for the tie in between Part A & B... That low String...I now intend to put that in the ending of "The Muse" and pick up immediately at the Beginning of Drawing Me closer. That should satisfy the que entrance of the strings in Part B.

RG , thanks for noting the poetry in the lyric. To me the lyrical quality is paramount , and drives the soul and life of a song. The vocal line came first..later the strings were added... I have a theory about how melody and bottom string octives work together... The Haunting effect ...was successful then

Glenny As always dude, You are energizing and a true boost. Thanks for your kind words

Scott: Thanks! ( i never heard a slow "Who" Tune)

Klugmo: When a vocalist of real mastery, such as yourself, tells me you enjoyed listening to my song...what can I say? I am honored! Much Thanks! : )

Jeff Thanks so much Bro!... I'm a proud Texas tune smith, who will one day, drown us both, in Beer and song Good catch on the typo.. (I have corrected it)

Dane: Good question.. I'm drawing a blank on the equipment but I will ask my partner. I can say that its professional equipment... But its not elaborately huge. George is a bassist, a drummer, and a certified Engineer. He's making things work . Could it be better? Sure...but we work with what we got. And of course...This is my very first serious project...replete with tons of mistakes and hindsight. My next project, wont be anything like this one... I will be posting up a link soon, of a feller , whom I went to high-school with, who dabbles in post Punk/Indie music...He's got some awesome stuff and I'm talking with him about a collab. I raise this point because his awesome stuff was done on a shoe string... (Pure minimalist if ever i knew one.) . I'll post more later.

Sans: As always I am honored by your thumbs-ups . My thanks to Jeanette for a really great compliment as well



Thanks to everybody and God bless!: )