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This is a song I WROTE a few years ago. It is a flawed song that had bad timing.
Not long after I wrote it the cup went from Winston to Nextel.
No insults and no instructions. Just comment at will.

#1 on my profile "MAYBE SOMEDAY"[/b]

I will be out of town and will read comments Monday.[/b]

Klug your vocals are always good, while I was on
your page I listened to all your songs on your player,
you really have a country voice. On your player I liked
the song "In Love With You" the best

I couldn't see or hear you being anything but a tenor,
there's not many good ones. (Ira Louvin one of the best)

"Maybe Someday" sounded like a pat Nashville start by
the band.

Sounds new country, it's a cool song, you'd think with the
subject matter you could do something with it. I don't know
sh#t about Nascar, but I got a friend here in Marionville who
writes songs about racing, for some Nascar driver, he sure use
to talk it up. I had his truck towed out of my driveway and he
don't talk much to me, that and I make faces at him.

I like that I can understand the words to the song.

Who knows Maybe Someday

Wonderful track Klug. Thanks, and I feel like I do most times when nice people, do nice things. feel humbled.
Great voice as usual, and your makeup, style design does you credit too.
I'll never be an opera singer, but you do have the feel for things.

That said, I've installed some tile in my day and when I got stressed, it usually ended up being a very loud and grouchy singing voice

The best part of your music is your recording(s).

The sound is studio quality, no denying that.
I wish I was into what you play, but I really am not.

Having said that, you really know how to record a track correctly and clearly.

If I ever liked country or had an inclination to like C+W, I would surely like what you have done here. If all of your music is this well produced, I fail to see why you are not doing more musically at this time.

Klugmo,

1) Excellent production/recording of the song...
2) Nice balance in the instruments.
3) Voice: As usual, Vocal is overall good ...(however there were A few spots that fell just shy of key in the upper registers)

Me personally, I cant think of a more boring subject to sing and write about about than Nascar...(Hell, I barely got through Taledega Nights....) But that's just me.,


I do have to say though, you took that boring theme and made a good story line of it...Nice job on the young lad's perspective and narration in the lyrical content.

And with all your work, I can feel the heart you put into the music

Overall I give this song a 3.5 /5

I thought you were talking about Hockey till I heard the song.


Sounds good to me.

Love it! I like Country I even play a little!

As usual I don't give a flying floop di flock what anyone says...
YOUR VOICE IS SO OVER THE TOP FOR COUNTRY VOCALS, Just plain GREAT!!

Knocked me out Klugmo! Country music is not my first love but it doesn't matter. Great music always sounds great! I vote some of the hottest tracks on Bandmix!

Technical note: They burn nitro in drag racing, not NASCAR

http://www.nascar.com/2010/news/busines ... index.html

Sounds real good to me and I don't listen to country.
Another fine job Klugmo

Klug,

Loved it. Nice vocals as usual. That would be a really good band to take on the road with you. You guys have that Nashville sound down pat.

Klug

If I had your voice I damn sure wouldn't have a day job!

Good work.

Talbot

Back in town. Oh my God Thanks for the coments. I am so sore from my
tree climb I can hardly move. I really didn't expect so many coments.
I explained at the start that this song was flawed. I learned a very important lesson with this song years ago.
You must always study in depth or have personal experience with your
subject matter in the song or you will not create something that crosses
into that special song relm in my opinion.

If you have never experienced real passionate Love from the heart. You can
not convey that feeling in a Love song.
Jeff Gordon does not race at Indy.
I tried to mix dirt track racing, drag racing, formula racing and Nascar into
the lyrics and failed miserably.
You must know what is real to write a real song. I had a good idea and got lazy
and forced it.
It needs a complete rewrite.
Hopefully I have learned from this mistake.[/b]

KLUGMO wrote:Back in town. Oh my God Thanks for the coments. I am so sore from my
tree climb I can hardly move. I really didn't expect so many coments.
I explained at the start that this song was flawed. I learned a very important lesson with this song years ago.
You must always study in depth or have personal experience with your
subject matter in the song or you will not create something that crosses
into that special song relm in my opinion.

If you have never experienced real passionate Love from the heart. You can
not convey that feeling in a Love song.
Jeff Gordon does not race at Indy.
I tried to mix dirt track racing, drag racing, formula racing and Nascar into
the lyrics and failed miserably.
You must know what is real to write a real song. I had a good idea and got lazy
and forced it.
It needs a complete rewrite.
Hopefully I have learned from this mistake.[/b]

Hey Klugmo, for what its worth, real songs can (and often do) have embellishment of fiction, strictly for the sake of poetic fortitude. For example, If I have a passion for Flying, I can transpose that into a passion for Cars (lyrically) I got the impression that in this song, you tried to capture a young character's passion...In my opinion, I think you succeeded.... In terms of story line, I did not get any sense of conflict...(As you know all good stories try to present a conflict) .
Some Ideas for conveying conflict/tragedy:

-The young boy wanted to be in Nascar, but witnessed the crash and death of his daddy , brother uncle or whoever...

-The Young Boy could only fantasize about Nascar, because in reality, he had no legs and was wheelchair bound

-The young Boy IS the daddy, uncle, brother, whoever, crashing...and recalls in s split second his passions for racing...etc. before he expires...


Ok I have offered some pretty morbid ones... But you get the idea...and you can run with lighter tragedies, etc.

Just my thoughts