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Hi Folks.
Recently I decided to rejoin my old world in stone. Since I've known you lot for a long time, I thought I would get your feedback

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=mDteiXUnsn8

Two sample tracks are comprised as incidental music.
Let me know wot you think?
Cheers,

Chipfryer

Chippy wrote:Hi Folks.
Recently I decided to rejoin my old world in stone. Since I've known you lot for a long time, I thought I would get your feedback

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=mDteiXUnsn8

Two sample tracks are comprised as incidental music.
Let me know wot you think?
Cheers,

Chipfryer

Nice Clean Video... But theres no escape.. You;ll have to approach this as an informational Hobbyist documentary... (Your audience will love and respect your for it.. )..
Note my creds... I have specialized in Curriculum development in a past life...

My suggestions ...

Intro: 30-45 seconds
1) Splash screens/ salutation
2) Brief statement about the purpose of your activity
3) Brief outline about what specifically you will cover
Note: Adjust your position/lighting so that the shadows from the tree/bushes aren't casting across your face.


Part One A: 2-3 minutes
Succinct History of stone-masonry (Illustrate with a collection of samples to show your audience whats been hangin round for thousands of years, every body has been looking at it and nobody ever noticed it ... (Element of Audience discovery)


Part One B: 2-3 minutes
1) Intro the common and various tools of the trade
2) Illustrate uses of tools with a common example/


Part One C: 3-6 minutes
1) Illustrate a sample start to finish. Peppers it by revisiting specified tools at work.


Part One D: 30 -45 seconds
Summarize and Recap / Roll credits...

For the background music tracks, its better to use instrumental only.

@ PaperDog
Intro: 30-45 seconds
1) Splash screens/ salutation
>> I agree. I thought this too long, but just went with it. I'm spontaneous, so things happen, or they don't. I'd prefer them to happen and get things done. But I do agree.
2) Brief statement about the purpose of your activity
>> Hmm.. There is a series here. When people look they will see. Can't force anybody to like something, and I feel over time things become a cult thing.
3) Brief outline about what specifically you will cover
>> I understand this, but again, I have an odd way with things, as in my music, and hope that all will be revealed as time passes. I hope it's interesting however?
Note: Adjust your position/lighting so that the shadows from the tree/bushes aren't casting across your face.
>> No, no and no. There will not be another time when I get my birdy friends singing at such a high velocity, and I rather like the shadows.
I like nature, and love warm places.

Thank you for you input, I love feedback.

@ RGM. I totally agree on this pal. The thing is that the song is about a horrible lawnmower/Landscaper guy, and I'd added birds singing to the track too via VST.
It sort of fitted in some ways, so I decided to keep that.

Many thanks both.

Chipfryer.