Chippy wrote:Hi Folks.
Recently I decided to rejoin my old world in stone. Since I've known you lot for a long time, I thought I would get your feedback
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=mDteiXUnsn8
Two sample tracks are comprised as incidental music.
Let me know wot you think?
Cheers,
Chipfryer
Nice Clean Video... But theres no escape.. You;ll have to approach this as an informational Hobbyist documentary... (Your audience will love and respect your for it.. )..
Note my creds...
I have specialized in Curriculum development in a past life...
My suggestions

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Intro: 30-45 seconds
1) Splash screens/ salutation
2) Brief statement about the purpose of your activity
3) Brief outline about what specifically you will cover
Note: Adjust your position/lighting so that the shadows from the tree/bushes aren't casting across your face.
Part One A: 2-3 minutes
Succinct History of stone-masonry (Illustrate with a collection of samples to show your audience whats been hangin round for thousands of years, every body has been looking at it and nobody ever noticed it ... (Element of Audience discovery)
Part One B: 2-3 minutes
1) Intro the common and various tools of the trade
2) Illustrate uses of tools with a common example/
Part One C: 3-6 minutes
1) Illustrate a sample start to finish. Peppers it by revisiting specified tools at work.
Part One D: 30 -45 seconds
Summarize and Recap / Roll credits...